1、Mothers Love
我早上起床晚了，所以没来得及喂猫就上学去了。当我下午放学回家时，猫都快要饿死了。它们围着我“喵喵”地叫着要饭吃。我拿出一条鱼扔过去。我想看看谁先抢到鱼。只见猫妈妈一口叼住鱼，迅速跑开了。它没有吃，而是放下鱼，回头召唤它的孩子们。四个小家伙狼吞虎咽地吃着鱼，而它们的妈妈就在一旁温柔地看着，一口也没吃。我想起了我的妈妈。她也是这样无私地对我的。这就是母爱了，我想。
I got up late this morning and went to school without feeding my cats.When I came home in the afternoon, the cats almost starved to death. They circled around me and crying for food. I took one fish out and threw it to the cats. I wanted to see who was the first one to catch the fish. Mother cat held it in her mouth and nm away quickly. She didn't eat it, but put it down, then called her children there. The four starving little cats began to devour the fish, but their mother just stayed there looking at them tenderly,without eating a little bit. On seeing that, I thought of my mother. She often does everything for me selflessly. This is a mother's love, I think.
2、Deep Mother Love-深沉的母爱
Every child is surrounded by the deep mother love. However, we often turn a blind eye to the love. One day I deeply felt the love.
One day I hurried home for lunch after school, because there would be an exam in the afternoon and I had expected to go back to school early to prepare for the exam. But when I got home, the lunch was not ready yet. I felt unhappy. When the dishes were served, I forund none I like. I ran out of my house angrily and wanderde on the street for a while,hungry. Then I walked to school.
When I got into the classroom, I saw a lunch box on my desk. One classmate told me that it was my mother ther that had brought it here.After opening the box, I found my favorite food inside. My eyes was moist with tears.
Mother gave me her love without asking for return, How deep mother love is!
每个孩子都被深沉的母爱包围着，然而我们经常对这种爱视而不见。一天我深深感受到了这种爱。
一天放学后我匆忙回家吃午饭，因为下午考试，我希望早一点回校准备考试。但是我到家时午饭还没有准备好，我很不高兴。饭菜端上来时，我发现没有一样是我喜欢的。我生气地跑出了家门，饿着肚子在街上游荡了一会，然后往学校走去。
走进教室后，我看到书桌上有一个午餐盒，一个同学告诉我那是我妈妈送来的。打开盖子，里面是我喜欢吃的。我的眼睛湿润了。
妈妈无私地把爱给了我，却不求任何回报。多么深沉的母爱啊!
【学生习作】
My Mother's Birthday
My mother is busy. She always busy works. (1) She often forgets her birthday.
Last Sunday was my mother's birthday. I invited several friends to have a birthday party for her.
It was five o'clock. Everything was ready. The candles were on the cake. When my mother came back to home (2), she was very surprise (3). She asked, "Whose birthday is it today?" We said, "Happy birthday to you!" She was very happy. At that time Lily gave my mother a nice present and said, "I hope you will like it" " Thank you. Can I open it now?" My mother asked.
"Certainly." Lily said. "Oh, it's a toy panda. How (4) a beautiful panda!" my mother said.
Meimei asked us, "Would you like singing?"(5) "Yes, we would love."(6) We said. We all sang with my mother.
That night my mother sang and danced like a little girl. She looked more (7) younger than before. （1）把always busy works改为 is always busy working，因为busy是形容词作表语，"忙于做某事"应该用be busy doing形式来表示。
（2）要把to去掉。 home在此句中是副词，不需要加to。
（3）本句surprise在系动词之后，要把surprise改成 surprised。 surprise具有名词、动词词性，其形容词有两个，他们分别是 surprised 和surprising，其中前者多用来指人，后者多用来指事。
（4）把how改成 what。在感叹句中how是用来修饰形容词或副词的，而what是用来修饰名词的。名词前可以有其他定语，单数可数名词前记住要加上 a或 an。
（5）把singing改成to sing some songs, Would you like…后接动词时要加to。
（6）在love后面加上to。对 "Would you like …?"问句的肯定回答应为would like (love) 后加 to，因为这是口语中动词不定式的省略，也就是说to后面的动词短语省略了。
（7）把more改成much，因为more不能用来修饰比较级。能够用来修饰比较级的有：a little, a bit, much, rather，far和even等。
【名师点评】
本文的小作者开篇就写出母亲的繁忙，为母亲忘了自己的生日和自己为她准备生日晚会做了铺垫，同时也教育了那些为了自己过生日讲究排场的同学，这也是本文的成功之处。另外小作者能够把学过的词汇、语法灵活地运用到本文中去，这也是值得我们学习的，不过还需要在个别词语用法上多下功夫。